Tuesday, April 2, 2019

Ollie's treasure story

3 comments:

  1. hi ollie
    i liked the way you said warm deep water
    great job keep it up.:p

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  2. Hey Ollie! I really like how you described what the chest included. I also like how you made paragraphs not mushing everything together. Next time you maybe could read again and check if you have any mistakes like your spelling for example billnorears. Next time you also could use capitals for names and put spaces when you but a comma.

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