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Monday, July 1, 2019
Canada's story
Tell me what you think about my middle part of this story.
I like your story about can he save her but on the last sentences I notices two things. I notices that you didn't have a capital and the first lot of word didn't really make sense. It said 'then 5 minutes went go by'. I think you was a post to say then 5 minutes went by. Thanks bye.
I like how you had a antagonist, protagonist and a main character. I also like your title ' Can he save her? ' I liked how your story have pictures beside it. I have noticed that you might need: introduction, body, your picture work and conclusion. And also I think you need to be more specific about your story.
Why did Mrs Thoms passed out so quickly? Why did you have to make this story? Why did you guys have the same hero like Spider man?
That is a grate work canda how long did it take you to do this wonderful work l like the way you added Mrs Thoms in it and had a spider man to describe you story you could have added more full stops From Risha
Hello Canada Truby here,
ReplyDeleteI like your story about can he save her but on the last sentences I notices two things. I notices that you didn't have a capital and the first lot of word didn't really make sense. It said 'then 5 minutes went go by'. I think you was a post to say then 5 minutes went by. Thanks bye.
Hello Ruru,
ReplyDeleteI like how you had a antagonist, protagonist and a main character. I also like your title ' Can he save her? ' I liked how your story have pictures beside it. I have noticed that you might need:
introduction, body, your picture work and conclusion.
And also I think you need to be more specific about your story.
Why did Mrs Thoms passed out so quickly? Why did you have to make this story? Why did you guys have the same hero like Spider man?
I hope to see a reply!
Kind Regards,
Celine
That is a grate work canda how long did it take you to do this wonderful work l like the way you added Mrs Thoms in it and had a spider man to describe you story you could have added more full stops From Risha
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ReplyDeletei like how you put wow words in your story like stroll sudden.///
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