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Monday, July 1, 2019
Daniel's story
Please read my story and tell me what you think about the problem in it.
Daniel Good job making blog post that is an amazing writing. I like how you add interesting words and describing words. And I also like you punctuation adding it into your story it makes it more like dramatic.
But why did you put underline on the other letters it really made me confuse. And Can you please next time make it bigger because I can't read it properly.
I'm Finau I am from Hornby Primary School. I like how you explained everything and it was really cool that you made a story with spider-man in it. I'm not a fan of him but he is cool. One problem is that it is tiny but we could just zoom in it. Other than that Nice job keep it up. Who is the sky scrapper in your story and what is his/her's name?.
Kia ora Ruru and Daniel! We enjoyed reading your story. We liked how you included adjectives in your story to create a vivid picture in the readers head (one dark and stormy night) You also included lots of complex punctuation like speech marks which made it interesting for the reader to read. We like how you included things you liked in the story, for example spider man and KFC it is very creative! We have a question! What is in the potion that makes Daisy come back to life again? From Punui-o-toka.
hi Danial i am Lawrence i like the way you made the title colorful and made it big so everyone can see.this reminded me of when i read a book spider man.next time you should put in some pictures so it can make the story more interesting
Hi Daniel its Michael. You did good work on your story. I like the way you told us every location. Next time you could make it look better because it is kinda blury. Once i did this as well.
Hello,
ReplyDeleteDaniel Good job making blog post that is an amazing writing. I like how you add interesting words and describing words. And I also like you punctuation adding it into your story it makes it more like dramatic.
But why did you put underline on the other letters it really made me confuse. And Can you please next time make it bigger because I can't read it properly.
Good job "Daniel" keep it up!
Hello Daniel/Ruru,
ReplyDeleteI'm Finau I am from Hornby Primary School. I like how you explained everything and it was really cool that you made a story with spider-man in it. I'm not a fan of him but he is cool. One problem is that it is tiny but we could just zoom in it. Other than that Nice job keep it up. Who is the sky scrapper in your story and what is his/her's name?.
Kind Regard's
Finau
HI my name is dylan hi daniel i like how you iksland it is asmsam next time u cud ad a bite more detal to your work
ReplyDeleteather wais arsome
Kia ora Ruru and Daniel! We enjoyed reading your story. We liked how you included adjectives in your story to create a vivid picture in the readers head (one dark and stormy night) You also included lots of complex punctuation like speech marks which made it interesting for the reader to read. We like how you included things you liked in the story, for example spider man and KFC it is very creative! We have a question! What is in the potion that makes Daisy come back to life again?
ReplyDeleteFrom Punui-o-toka.
Great work Daniel in my opinion add some colour on next time
ReplyDeletehi Danial
ReplyDeletei am Lawrence
i like the way you made the title colorful and made it big so everyone can see.this reminded me of when i read a book spider man.next time you should put in some pictures so it can make the story more interesting
Hi Daniel its Michael. You did good work on your story. I like the way you told us every location. Next time you could make it look better because it is kinda blury. Once i did this as well.
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