Monday, April 1, 2019

Shanaya's Story

6 comments:

  1. hi well done guys
    from JACKSON

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  2. Shanaya I really like the end sentence you included as that makes the story finish well. I also like the adjectives you used to describe the treasure.
    Next time you could delete the p1 p2 p3 because I know that you are using paragraphs.
    I would love to find some sunken treasure like this.

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  3. Hi Shanaya,
    I love the way you add a good background colour and the way you described the treasure so much.Next time you should add more adjectives to your story.
    I really want to read more of your Sunken Treasure story.

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  4. good job Shanaya keep up the hard work i bet Cameron would like this good job :)

    sadie

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