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Friday, June 7, 2019
Michael's Fairground Description
Hi my name is Michael.
I have written a description of a fairground. Please give me some feedback.
hi Michael, you are very good at this description I really like the way you added KFC! and the fairground was pretty busy place! that was really cool but next time please can you make it really details so I can actually imagine it in my head. Daniel. ツツツツツ
hi Michael, you are very good at this description I really like the way you added KFC! and the fairground was pretty busy place! that was really cool but next time please can you make it really details so I can actually imagine it in my head. Daniel. ツツツツツ
ReplyDeletehi Michael, i like the way you did paragraphs that have strong adjectives and similes.
ReplyDeletei think you could use longer paragraphs and metaphors