Wednesday, May 15, 2019

Siobhan's Te Kahu Park story

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  1. Hi Siobhan, it's Punui-o-toka here. We enjoyed reading your Te Kahu park story. We liked how you used really good wow words (adjectives) to help add detail to your story. We especially liked the words crackling and crunching. You made a few of our readers remind themselves of when they did cross country and were 'huffing and puffing'. Next time you could re read your work to see if you could add any punctuation or capital letters. What else could you see from the tower?

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